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As my friend said, "There should be more tails involved".
Edit: I'd like to get critiques on this one, please. I guess I should have done it earlier...
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A random OC which to have 'tamed' Fluttershy, a scene then taken of which the tail is used to display affection. The idea hits into a more romantic/seductive-nature if taken this way and that can be displayed well by Fluttershy's blush and the softening-spread of the OC's tail. Simple but meets the vision and the 'more tails'.

Not particularly original, although it's a rare and nice sight to see an animal-only trait (tails in this instance) actively used instead of placed. The backgrounds rather simple too but it could have still supported the drawing better with a mood-esque color or a mixture as it makes Fluttershy stand out currently as well does not assist when the drawing is attracting a certain mood/atmosphere to it. Overall it's a nice drawing but isn't particularly 'impactful' due to simplicity.

You're drawing style is very pleasant, you added some realism through your style of shading especially to the mane and tail without causing it to 'detach' too much from the smooth bodies that these little ponies have. Approach towards ear-style, working with a relatively line-less style, etc. so Technique stands well.

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Alright, normally I pass on by a drawing that generally does well, but you asked for a critique so here's my analysis.

Fluttershy's cutie-mark is in-accurate, it's one butterfly on top and two on the bottom as well tilted to the sides.

Fluttershy's tail starts to feel stiff near the end because it has the appearance of clumping up strongly due to the addition of strong lighting/shading.

Fluttershy's ear is placed too low, this seems to be the only instance I've seen you draw the ear mid-way of the head instead of at the 'corner' in a sense.

Fluttershy's far eye touches the side of her head which normally when drawing for angled heads you'd still keep a distance from the side of the head to the far eye except when far angled.

Fluttershy's highlights aren't relative to the eye-size, they appear the same for both despite the far eye appearing smaller.

Fluttershy's eyelashes feel too minimal, and personally I see the top-line of the eyes too thin especially on the far eye.

Fluttershy's front hooves are obscured a bit, although the tail works as such it's best to display at the very least move the OC's tail so it cuts off right where the intersection of lines of the two from hooves are. (Best to avoid line-intersections like this in general if possible).

By perspective, the ground appears to curve upward farther from the viewer as the plane at which Fluttershy stands appears as if the viewer is near her position but moreso above the OC because the OC's standing plane is more curved up.

The OC's snout line/dot kinda stands out.

The OC's head seems turned a bit more than naturally comfortable especially because the shading and positioning of the character implies farther than a 90 degree head turn which normally you wouldn't go so far in a calm situation like so.

The shading under the head also displaces Fluttershy's head a bit because normally for these ponies, the side of their heads under the ear connects smoothly to the neck. You have it correct in the 'Rock, Paper, Scissors' drawing with Rarity for example but this may be argued towards a style/preference.

The OC's tail spread is a bit strange because the tail's picked up at the top but from long (left) to short (right) portions of the tail with an entire section that hangs loosely. It'd probably seem more natural to have the whole tail in momentum or to have the tail pick up a certain distance from the hind instead of a 'diagonal slice' of it.

The OC's tail angle/positioning is odd since, based on character positioning, it's aiming straight left. Tail also lacks depth unlike the rest of the mane/tails in the drawing because you applied the same lighting/shading consistently combined with the above making for an illusion at which the tail appears to be behind the OC as normal but is aimed almost perpendicularly left instead when analyzing Fluttershy.

The shading gets strong in the mane/tail but does not delve to be as strong on the body, as well the mane/tail does not seem to cast a shadow on it's surrounding except near the 'forehead' area. Especially noticeable for the OC's back-part of the mane which displays dark shading, but since it's placed 'above' the head that there would be expected of shading on the head there as well.

Artwork composition could use a touch of work because the characters are centered to show focus on them, but they aren't entirely focused on due to having their full bodies visible which again is not assisted by having a simple background. The simple background takes up a good amount of space as well and this 'blank space' is unnecessary for this drawing.

If I may add a suggestion, the eyes kind of stand out a bit due to retaining the show's simplistic style yet you've delved into your own style for everything else, perhaps softening the colors and highlights would help a bit.

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Sorry for the wordiness there, if there's anything really confusing, or you don't understand one of my points, just mention and I'll see if I can explain myself better or to help me see something which I may have missed. I'm a bit confused with my own wording as well sometimes anyways.

Also since you asked for the critique, I may or may not have decided that it was best to analyze and compare to high standards, kinda the way I self-critique myself in fact.
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:iconzaiali:
zaiali Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013
Well well well . . . I don't get it.
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SonicSatamX93 Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013  Student Writer
This is beautifully drawn.

Great job.
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:iconrascyr:
Rascyr Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012
It's a cutest thing i've ever seen!
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:iconsokolas:
Sokolas Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks :)
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:iconrascyr:
Rascyr Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012
А, так ты русский =D
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:iconsokolas:
Sokolas Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Угу
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:iconvunlinur:
Vunlinur Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Student Digital Artist
I like it, only one thing, or maybe rather 4 things; Their eyes: Fluttershy eyes don't match the original shape at all, and the OC's are... slanted? The second one i mention just because I don't like them, the rest is fine. :)
But... gosh that plot >/)<
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:iconsokolas:
Sokolas Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you
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j300mindstorm Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, this is really good!! Well painted and well chosen colours, it's amazing!
And a bit that caught my eye was the hoof of the OC (the lifted hoof) where it has a brighter colour shade to keep the circle of the hoof.
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:iconsokolas:
Sokolas Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks!
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:iconhelsaabi:
Helsaabi Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012
I really love it! <3
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CardDontShoot Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012
I love how much poof and volume you give to the mane and tail! The expression on Fluttershy is perfect! Love this piece! Keep it up man!
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:iconsokolas:
Sokolas Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks :)
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cassiedashie Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012
I love your work, so wonderfully done ! <3
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:iconsokolas:
Sokolas Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks!
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:iconcassiedashie:
cassiedashie Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012
I actually really love it !
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:iconaymspony:
Aymspony Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
What! A secret twin! You'd think my parents would have told me about this...
(also, adorable picture! :D )
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:iconsokolas:
Sokolas Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks :) The similarity is totally unintentional, It's just a random pony as I've explained in the comments above.
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:iconaymspony:
Aymspony Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Haha, yeah, I saw! (And I wasn't being passive aggressive or anything, I just think it's funny. ;) )
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Freethinker5 Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012
Your friend was right! Though I usually like to think of HER rubbing the tail under my chin. ; )
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:iconfreethinker5:
Freethinker5 Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012
Familiarity breeds comfort.
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:iconsokolas:
Sokolas Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I guess she's too shy for that
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:iconmaytee:
Maytee Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012
а что за вторая поняша? )
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:iconsokolas:
Sokolas Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Рандомный понь. Кьютимарка символизирует, что его талант - животные, как и у Шай. Такой вот служебный роман :) Я довольно часто выдумываю их из головы по ходу работы...
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Maytee Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012
понятно )
просто я такие куюти минимум два раза встречала на табуне, но моя память слишком дырявая, чтобы помнить кого точно...
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Sokolas Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Не, я не рисую реквесты и чужих ОСов (ну, разве что в качестве подарка). Да и на табуне я не настолько активно сижу, чтобы знать кучу людей "в лицо" с их ОСами...
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Maytee Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012
я просто слишком часто смотрю табунский рисовальный блог, и осов уже знаю в "лицо".
кстати, мне кажется, реквесты тебе пользовались бы дикой популярностью )
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Sokolas Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Ну, насчет дикой популярности ты преувеличиваешь, но вообще да, мне регулярно кто-нибудь пишет и просит нарисовать ОСа. Я по этому поводу даже в журнал тут уже писал...
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Maytee Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012
ну... народ любит такое цг. для табуна оно весьма и весьма качественное, при этом не замороченое, очень близкое к канону, но всё же своё. цвета, опять же, каноничные, яркие.
запись я читала, ага. я даже согласна.
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:iconsokolas:
Sokolas Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Тут, кстати, подумалось об еще одном аспекте: если рисовать заказы, то получится переход от рисования того, что нравится мне, к рисованию того, что понравится зрителю ("заказчику"). Я, конечно, не стал бы рисовать то, что мне не нравится, но все равно стал бы задумываться: а что по этому поводу скажет зритель и понравится ли ему? Это уже будет какой-то фансервис, и мне хотелось бы по возможности избежать такого отношения.
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HeFFatos Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
It looks amazing! I so love those realistic hair (you've inspired me and the next things I'll do will be realistic hair and more realistic skin, I hope it'll turn out at least acceptable :)).
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:iconsokolas:
Sokolas Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wow, it's reaaly nice to hear that my drawings inspire someone!
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Zixinus Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012
Who is the other pony? The one with the dog-print cutie-mark?
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:iconsokolas:
Sokolas Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I've made him up while drawing. He's just a random pony whose special talent is animals care. I didn't think of the name or backstory, though.
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Zixinus Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012
Makes sense.

Oh, and the image is surprisingly sexy. :p
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:iconsokolas:
Sokolas Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks, that was the point :)
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Masdragonflare Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I like where this is going :iconifyouknowplz:
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AskSock-N-Socks Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012
Haha, agreed :XD:
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:iconardail:
Ardail Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
your art is so much better than mine...
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:iconsokolas:
Sokolas Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Please, don't say that. I've had such thoughts way too often and I know how much they hurt. The only way to overcome this is to think "Why exactly I like someone's art more than mine" and once you figure this out, start working on it.
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Ardail Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Pretty much, and I'm working on it, I'm just terrible at drawing subjects, takes me forever to draw even one character
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midnightfox1 Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
awesome.
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SonOfTheNorthe Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012
Certainly brings a new meaning to "getting some tail."
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:iconsokolas:
Sokolas Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I didn't know about this idiom before. Now I think it could be a very fitting caption for the picture.
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ApocalypseKitty Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Ha!
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:iconzaiali:
zaiali Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012
uuuh . . . well.
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:iconsokolas:
Sokolas Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
What? Wouldn't you like to feel that fluffyness on your chin? Smell its scent as the tail brushes you, teasing...
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:iconzaiali:
zaiali Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012
*sniffs computer* I CAN'T!
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:iconsire-sword:
Sire-Sword Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Tails should always be envolved in foreplay.
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SonOfTheNorthe Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012
*involved

You have dared to make a typo on the internet. May god have mercy on your soul.
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